Mostly positive review because if I’ve bought your story it’s because I’ve purchased it based on your blurb (and not because of other reviews).
I will comment on:-
- Engagement, e.g. this story kept me engaged because of the natural sounding dialogue
- Story “believability”, e.g. even with the flying monkeys the author was able to …
- Story consistency, e.g. Jane, the main character, was developed throughout the story and it was as a result of showing, with some telling, but it was a natural progressive development
- Character/s Chat, e.g. Max, the antagonist, was so likable it increased tension as I wanted him to just do some good, even just once
- General story structure, e.g. great “story idea” with good climax
- Favourite part of the story, e.g. when Jane and Max came face to face and had to fight off the flying monkeys together
- Something (not based on writing style) that made me laugh, sigh, cry, cringe, think etc., e.g. I cringed when Jane embarrassed herself in public – I could really relate
To earn five stars you’ll need to meet 5 of the stuff above.
The least you’ll get is three stars – why? See below (similar to my LC’s Model 1)
*The first star is for the effort you have made to write and share your work – you deserve it.
**The second star is because your story is readable and has a reasonable plot. But notice I have said “story” so there must be evidence of a start, middle, and finish. There must be a decent story idea in there. If I’ve bought your book it’s because the blurb has already revealed this anyway.
***The three stars must show evidence of some character development and scene building. I’m expecting some fresh ideas. I’d also be seeing evidence of pace control, dialogue, and POV decisions with good execution relevant to scenes and story. The most important aspect for a three-star rating is that I’d expect to see showing and with a little telling, and conflict = tension.